Wensis Aviles

11-17-14

                On Wednesday I got to work with a Student from an Eng101 class. The student picked discrimination against gays and lesbian. Although the student gave great details the paper itself had to be adjusted. The student had gotten some main ideas down but needed to give more details. I gave the Student a good advice, I told her never leave the reader guessing. I told her it’s like being in a conversation with someone and you go on and on about a specific topic without giving detail. For example I can say I dislike ice cream. But I am not telling you why. Was it a specific flavor or in general? Was I allergic? What made me dislike ice cream? This is the detail I wanted the student to understand sometimes giving example about a simple topic can expand the writers thinking.

                The student also watched a movie and talks a little about it in the beginning and jumps into research and statistic. I told the student I will like to know more about the movie then statistic and research although it was good evidence not really complete. The student talks about the movie two pages later. I told her when you start a paper think about it as a table of content you always want to let the reader know what you will be discussing before putting your thoughts down in writing or typing. What is the beginning middle and end? I told the student I took public speaking before you always want the reader to have some kind of feeling or compassion to your paper. That goes back to ethos, pathos logos.